Anyway, the time has come for the first Campaign challenge! I actually just came back from a mini-vacation in Las Vegas, Nevada, and I have school tomorrow so I was rushing through this. But I did complete all three of the challenges - the two phrases at the beginning and ending of the story, and the story is exactly 200 words.
Here it is!
The door swung open, letting in the crisp fall breeze and an excited twelve-year-old girl. “I'm home!” she called out.
She kicked off her shoes and threw her backpack on the floor, much to my dismay. Then she rushed to her room. “Honey, come pick up your stuff from the floor, please.” I ordered her as politely as I could.
The girl rolled her eyes and ran back to the living room to pick up her belongings. Afterward, she ran back to her room and started to get ready. “We don't have much time, Mom! It starts at six!”
She wriggled out of her uniform and changed into more casual attire. Then, she grabbed her cell phone, small poster, and slipped on her sneakers. “This is so exciting! I can't believe you're doing this for me! Thank you!” she squealed, jumping around the kitchen. “Oh, and hurry up and finish getting ready!” she added as she ran back to the door.
I couldn't help but laugh; I have never seen her so happy, even though we weren't there yet. I finished applying my make-up, grabbed my purse, and stepped outside. Then, the door swung shut.
Like I said, I was rushing through this, so I apologize if it isn't the best. Its about a young girl attending her first concert with her mom. I used myself as an inspiration for this story.
Well, I guess I better wrap this up. I start school tomorrow and I need to read all of your entries I need to finish getting ready.
10 comments:
This was very lighthearted and fun, well written!
Great job, Isabella - and congrats on getting all 3 of the challenges completed in your 200 words! Keep at it, you're well on your way!
Nice job! I liked that you were the inspiration :) Good luck with school!
Very clear excitement on the girl's part. Great job!
Good luck with school.
Wow! You're 11? And already have a great voice? That's awesome! Good for you.
I liked this scene. The girl's enthusiasm makes me want to know what event they're going to.
Great job, Isabella! :)
As the mother of two girls around that age i could easily relate. nice job. Mine is #72
I thought this was very well written. You didn't even have to explain what was going on, cause I figured it out! It's great! You can feel the excitement! Very fun! Great job!
I didn't need the explanation at the end- I got what was happening in your story- trust your writing and your readers, you did a good job it's very sweet. I also liked how you know your mom is trying to be polite when asking you to do stuff :)
Hey, hey! I'm one of the judges in the Campaign Challenge and I wanted to know that I picked your piece as one of my top favorites! Now it will move on to the next round of judging...congrats! :)
I can definitely sense the excitement in this piece!
I'm a fellow campaigner. Following your blog!
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